Aim: To make a boring sentence into an interesting paragraph.
1. The music was loud.
2. The music was wild!
3. The music was wild as I walked past the bar after school.
4. The music was wild as I walked past the bar after school.
5. The music was wild as I walked past the bar after school. Seeing them singing the same song.
6. The music was wild as I walked past the bar after school. Seeing them singing the same song for someone's birthday! I was happy for them!
Conclusion
I feel like I did a great job and it was more interesting then I thought it would be.
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