The Present

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

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• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.

The Present

The Present

One sunny day blinds shut I was playing video games. Then my mum came home with a present and opened the blinds. My eyes went bright. Mum said “Open the present that I got you. I looked in the box and there was a puppy. “Cool” I said.  It was light brown and had smooth fur. I saw his paw was broken. I threw it away and started to play my video game again, acting like I did not care.

The dog found a red ball. He bumped into the cupboard and he got the ball. I thought it was a very silly dog. The dog gave it to me and turned its head. I kicked the ball away.  The dog went to catch it but he fell in the box. He tried to get out of the box. I smiled at the puppy. Thinking of how silly he was. Bumping into things he went out of the box.  Thinking of where was the red ball. It was right in front of me. He caught the ball and gave it to me. I smiled and got up on my crutches.

Putting the ball in my pocket. Opening the back door. I said “Mum we’ll be outside. I think this dog is very silly. There is no dog like this. I like him, he's just like me. I think my dog and I will go perfect in the future.

By: Risha